Does anyone like my poem?

I wrote a poem, and I wanted some feedback on it.

Eyes, pale shapes of gray

The fire that burns inside without delay

Skin of porcelain

Goddess of my temptation

Cheeks of rose

I fall into this hole, where I decompose

Break down into my love for you

Lips of sacred fire

Temptations give into desire

Hair like spun gold

My heart beats for the love it holds

Those eyes, pale shades of gray

My love is what you read this day.

Does anyone like my poem?

FEEDBACK:

Give it rhythm, make the words bounce as you read them aloud. Don't chop it up into little short lines that lose the meaning of the words in just trying to read it. If you are going to rhyme, do it consistently, and don't leave out lines.This could become a good poem, but as it is, it is just barely a poem at all.. Try again, I think you can do it.

Does anyone like my poem?

Pretty good, actually loved it.